Blog 5T

Autobiographical Writing-  What someone writes about themselves
Topical Theme- When you write your paper about the theme you use.
Commiserate-To empathize or sympathize with someone.
Order of importance- Listing something in order from most important to least important.

I found topical theme the most interesting because I like this idea of writing something based on a theme. I think it is a cool way to write a paper and I think it helps the paper to be directed. I also think this way of writing can be a burden because it can make you feel limited when you write. This is why I find this so interesting because it can be so useful and so burdening at the same time.

Blog 5R

As I was writing my paper I found that it was easier to write than what I had previously thought. Going through what is expected in class really helped with this. As I was writing I actually had more than I thought and realized I did not know exactly where I wanted to bring my paper. I also realized that I do not know what I want my thesis to be so I feel I do not yet have one in my paper. I think that if I get some review back on my paper that it may help me to see what I would like my thesis to be. I also think that if i write my paper out and see what I have that maybe I can come up with a thesis afterwards that fits into my paper. Telling my story is easy but realizing what message I want to get across is more difficult. I am hoping to get some feedback on my paper so I can see more of what is unclear in my paper and what people want to know more about. This way I can write more in depth and clearer. I am trying to approach writing my paper in a different way than I have in the past hoping that I can do better than I have before.

First draft

Heather Masoud

Eng 112

Everyone has a vision of where they would like to see themselves or where they think they would be at a certain point in there life. For me personally I graduated high school and I was going to college and doing the steps that I wanted to take to where I wanted to get in my life. I was having the time of my life, finally felt freedom and living my life as a 19 year old. I had everything easy going, living at my fathers house and only paying for my car. I had it really good. I was taken care of. I would come home and everything was done for me like dinner and the internet was just there and I did not pay rent.I came back to Connecticut after living in Florida for seven months. I was just feeling what it was like to be home again and appreciate my family in a way I never did. 

I met my boyfriend about a year after I came back home. At first I did not want much to do with him. I pushed him off and I was thinking about the freedom I had and me living my life. After a little while I decided to give him a chance. I wanted to see where things would go because after all what was the big deal? If things did not work or I changed my mind walking away would be easy. I did not have ties to him and after all he was enjoyable to be around. 

We were together about three months when the entire perspective of our relationship changed. I dropped him off in New York for the week to go be with his family. I was over at my friends house. I was four days late for my period. I decided to take a pregnancy test and sure enough it came out positive. At that moment I was in shock a little because in all honesty I never thought it would happen to me. I knew I had to face telling my father that I was pregnant. My father is from palestine and he grew up in Kuwait. He came from a very different up bringing. I knew he would have a hard time dealing with this because I was not married. Besides that, I bearly knew my boyfriend. I did not know how he was going to react or what he would want or what he would think. 

I texted my boyfriend right away to tell him what I had just found out. About ten minutes passed and there was no responce. I could not wait any longer, so I called him. When he answered he was sleeping so he had not yet seen the text I sent him. When he finally read it he was also in shock. He said to me,”What do you mean your pregnant?” I replied “Exactly what is says Brandon.” I had taken three tests and all three came out positive. So I knew I was pregnant. 

After I found out I was pregnant it took me three weeks before I told my dad I was pregnant. He was angry, what parent wouldn’t be? My father told me to leave about a week after I told him I was pregnant.The comfort of my own home was gone. The person I needed the most did not even want to look at me. This started off my life as I never thought it would be. One of the most difficult times I have ever been through. I always had my dad there for me no matter what it was and now he was abandoning me and did not care what was going on with me.

After he asked me to leave I went to my boyfriends house I told him what happened. He did not push me away or anything. He was by my side. The one person who I thought might run from me was there with me. We went through everything 

(This is the start to my paper, I stopped writing because I do not know where I want to take this yet and what other information I should add into my paper)

My mixtape

Lean on me- Bill Withers
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QPoTGyWT0Cg

Many people come to me when they need advice or help with something. I am a reliable and trustworthy person. I am the person that many people lean on. I am the go to person. I am always there for people and I am understanding. In this song the lyrics explain how I am there for people.

Don't stop believing-Journey
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KCy7lLQwToI

In general I am a very hopeful person. I try to find the bright side to things. I believe if there is a will there is a way. I don't give up I always try to find a way to find how to get to where I need to be. The lyrics in this song explain it. Don't stop believing is how I am.

I'm a survivor-Desinys child
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y8fysvEFIck

I have been through my fair share of going through tough times. Whatever obstacle is thrown at me I always find a way to get through it. The lyrics in this song describes how I am. I'm just going to keep on surviving. I do not care what it takes.

What doesn't kill you makes you stronger-Kelly Klarkson
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xn676-fLq7I

The song lyrics describe how I keep going with my life. What does not kill me will make me stronger. I believe everything we go through is a learning experience. In general we have to make mistakes or go through things  to become wiser and stronger. This song explains that things may hurt you but you keep going you keep striving. And with enough patience you will get there as a stronger person.

Pocket full of sunshine- Natasha beddingfield
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gte3BoXKwP0

I think this song is fun and uplifting. It is not the lyrics of this song that describes me but the upbeat music. I am a fun person to be around. I think this song is energetic and I am energetic especially when it comes to my daughter.

Blog 3T

Autobiography- An author writes a story about themselves.

Biography- An author writes about someone else's life.

Annotating- When you take your own notes on a story and use this to critically analyze the story.

I really liked the way we described an autobiography. When we went through the stories in class it was a great example to see the underlying messages in them. There were so many things I did not pick up on myself. I liked how someone wrote about there own life but included in the story many things about themselves without it being the over all story.

Blog 3R

Going over how to write a thesis and what is expected in one has helped me to understand more of what is expected. I always have a problem with writing papers and how to elaborate. Going over the thesis has shown me how I can improve my paper. If I have a strong thesis I can have the potential for a strong paper. I also liked going through the short stories in the book because it is helping me to see how to analyze better. I have never been good at reading into a story. Going through them to see the underlying message was very helpful. This showed me what questions I should ask myself. When I write my own paper I will be able to analyze my own work to see what I am missing or what more I can add to it. This is what I need to work on this week the most. I need to figure out how to analyze my paper and how to make it stronger. I need to open my mind to different ways of writing and different ways to get my message across to my readers.

Thesis homework

1. Not strong, the thesis should state why the commute adds one hour.
2. Not strong, this thesis should state why students are at a disadvantage.
3. Not strong, the thesis was announced.
4. Not strong, in the thesis the word should was used, in a counter argument someone can say I should but I do not have to.
5. Not strong, many people already agree with this.
6. Not strong, many people already agree with this.
7. Not strong, many people already agree with this.
8. Strong thesis.
9. Not strong, the thesis was announced.

My own thesis statement

• It is more beneficial to live on campus then it is to commute because your resources are available at your dispense.
• College students have a higher chance of trying drugs and drinking alcohol because they like to part.